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Nakikaru, flames of the mist

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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Sun Apr 08, 2012 1:12 am

Current leader: Unknown

Description: Nakikaru a clan born in the forest near the hidden mist village. They worship the god-like beast Kirika Ookami (Mist Fire Wolf.) They have the ability to create mist and change it into fire or an explosion. They are a clan of ninjas with powerful ninjutsu but can exceed in taijutsu or genjutsu, depending on the ninja. The Nakikaru don't know the origin of the clan, nor do anybody else. Their only knowledge of the clan origins was destroyed or killed a long time ago.

All of the Nakikaru clan has a right purple eye with a slit pupil and white hair lightly tinted with another color that they subconsciously choose at birth. Due to their kekkei genkai the Nakikaru clan has a strong resistance to heat, if they weren't their jutsu would kill them instantly.

Required elements: Fire, Water

Kekkei Genkai: Flaming Mist

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Current Members: 1/2

1.Raikunagi Nakikaru
2.

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Nakikaru Jutsu

Ninjutsu:

Rank D:

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Rank C:

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Rank B:

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Rank A:

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Rank S:

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Genjutsu

Rank C:

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Rank A:

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Last edited by Raikunagi nakikaru on Wed Apr 11, 2012 10:41 pm; edited 13 times in total
Raikunagi Nakikaru
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Post by Zephyr Uchiha Sun Apr 08, 2012 8:58 am

Combination elements like Senju and Yuki clans get two members. Also, I notice a distinct lack of capitalization in your jutsus. Otherwise, cool idea, and it's something that definitely can work.
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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Sun Apr 08, 2012 8:43 pm

Finished
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Post by Zephyr Uchiha Sun Apr 08, 2012 9:29 pm

You don't have to list the handseals if you don't want to.

I'd like capitals in the descriptions, too.

What does the Mini Mist Fire Wolf (D Rank) do? Is it a messenger-type?

I noticed you could actually just make a contract for your clan summons... But I have to finish Summoning rules and add some Canon contracts first. So hold off on that.
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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Sun Apr 08, 2012 10:50 pm

Edited.
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Post by Zephyr Uchiha Mon Apr 09, 2012 10:44 am

The length of a Genjutsu cast is in the Genjutsu rules. You don't have to list them.

You have several "Burning Mist" Jutsus that have the same exact descriptions. What sets them apart besides their rank? Their power? Their area of effect? The length of the jutsu? Things like this have to be mentioned.
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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Mon Apr 09, 2012 7:43 pm

edited.
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Post by Zephyr Uchiha Mon Apr 09, 2012 8:57 pm

So, wait... The clan is immune to fire techs?
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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Mon Apr 09, 2012 9:17 pm

not completely I'll edit it.
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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Tue Apr 10, 2012 8:45 pm

And now i am done.
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Post by Zephyr Uchiha Wed Apr 11, 2012 2:29 am

I don't see there being any Taijutsu logically.

Don't learn the Summoning techs. They should get converted into a Summon Contract when I make some.

Otherwise, pending further Admin approval.
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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Wed Apr 11, 2012 10:49 pm

Edited.
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Post by Raikunagi Nakikaru Tue Apr 17, 2012 10:07 pm

Edited and revised again. For now it is complete!
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Post by Rikuo Namikaze Tue Apr 24, 2012 3:15 am

I see nothing wrong with this and since Zephy needs a Number two I approve as well.
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